Bemax ROOTS 14 March 2022

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IELTS Marking Criteria

Writing Task 2.

A. Task Response (TR)

This criterion checks your relevance of your answer. It includes: 

1. If you have answered to the question fully.

2. If you have written at least 250 words.

3. If you have given reasons for your answers. (BP 1 and 2, the second point)

4. If you have given relevant examples in BP 1 and 2.

 

B. Coherence and Cohesion (CC)

This criteria checks how well you have organized your essay  using a range of linking words. In Bemax we follow a four paragraph structure.

Paragraph 1. Introduction. 

* Paraphrase of the general statement

* Thesis sentence, which is the answer. 

Paragraph 2. Body para 1.

* Argument 1.

* Reason (Explanation) for the argument.

* A relevant example

* Conclude BP 1. 

Paragraph 3.  Body para 2.

* Argument 2

* Reason (Explanation) for the argument.

* A relevant example

* Conclude BP2

Paragraph 4. Conclusion.

* Re-state the general statement

* Restate the thesis.

C. Lexical Resource (LR4. Grammatical Range and Accuracy (GRA)

This criterion checks your vocabulary power. You are required to use "less common words" and demonstrate a range of words with much attention on usage and collocation.

D. Grammatical Range and Accuracy (GRA) 

This criterion checks your grammar. You are required to use a range og grammatical devices, such as:

a) Complex sentences

b) Compound

c) Active and passive sentences

d) Negative sentences

e) Conditional sentences and 

f)  a range of tenses.

Given below is a  Task 2 question which satisfies all the requirements.

Writing Task 2 Essay

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You have 40 minutes to complete the task.

Write at least 250 Words.

 Some people say that parents have the most significant influence in a child's development. However, others say that things like television have the the most important influence. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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Paragraph 1, Introduction

It is often argued that the parents are the most influential people in the growth and development of a child (view 1); however, others believe that friends and gadgets, such as television, have a pronounced impact on them (view 2). (Paraphrase). This essay will dwell on both the views and establish my opinion that parents, without any doubt, play a vital role in a child's life, but currently friends and media are becoming even more persuasive. (Thesis)

Paragraph 2.  Body para 1,

To embark on, parents assuredly are significant because they are the first teachers and role models for a children. (Argument 1) They learn much of the social skills from the parents during their formative period. In fact, the atmosphere of the home has a titanic influence in the moulding children's character and personality. (Reason for argument1) For instance, a recent study conducted by the Kerala University reveals that children born to successful parents also become winners in their lives, whereas children coming from dysfunctional families are more likely to manifest personality aberrations. (Example) Therefore, we can confirm that parents insert an undeniable influence on children.

(Conclusion BP1)

On the flip side, in this age of information explosion, parents are becoming less influential. To start with, they are very busy and find very little time to spend with their children. Moreover, media has assumed the role of babysitters. Children spend enormous amount of time with television and get influenced by them. Consequently, their understanding of the world is shaped more by the programmes they watch than by their parents. To illustrate, a survey conducted by the National Geography shows that children are influenced more by the media than by their parents or family. Hence, it is clear that children are swayed by external factors.

To conclude, parents are slowly are losing their influence on children. This lacuna has been filled by friends and gadgets. Thus, this essay has discussed both the views and validated my opinion that despite the unequivocal influence of parents, in the modern era, friends and e-gadgets assert a vehement impact on children.

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